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 jeu. 16 déc. 2010, 22:54
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ven. 17 déc. 2010, 09:05
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QUOTE (houstonmusic @ Thu 16 Dec 2010, 22:54)  this makes no sense, you know that, don't you? Why?  d-cipher
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ven. 17 déc. 2010, 19:44
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QUOTE (d-cipher @ Fri 17 Dec 2010, 09:05) QUOTE (houstonmusic @ Thu 16 Dec 2010, 22:54) this makes no sense, you know that, don't you? Why? d-cipher To start with, I don't think this is news at all, it is concern and speculation, more suitable to an editorial section or forum thread. That aside, grammar, clarity and allusion could improve a lot. "Is it sensible to be overhasty?" No! by definition!  We can understand some of what you're trying to say however - am I making a fuss of (exaggerating, blowing out of proportion) this or what? ..But *what* would you be making a fuss of? That is not *clear*, which in this kind of text, it really needs to be. Now, I know many french does'nt hold the english language in very high regard, but ..please. Give at least your written english a once over, maybe read a novel in english now and then. "we can wonder whether they will all possible applications for music appear in the online catalog. " ..hell yeah, inspector Clouseau! "The alleged news that Steve Jobs is said to have decided to move the date...13th" Basic newscoverage writing: date for, of, what? Include *what* has been moved, *from* where and *to*.
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sam. 18 déc. 2010, 10:39
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[/quote] To start with, I don't think this is news at all, it is concern and speculation, more suitable to an editorial section or forum thread. That aside, grammar, clarity and allusion could improve a lot. "Is it sensible to be overhasty?" No! by definition! Now, I know many french does'nt hold the english language in very high regard, but ..please. Give at least your written english a once over, maybe read a novel in english now and then. [/quote] Oh, I see, I have some parts of first translation merged in this text and it make no sense, of course! I apologize. Ok, I'm going to correct this editorial, but only grammar points... Inspecteur Clouseau 
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